40.1 Imagine that you are doing a project on what volunteer activities are popular among teenagers in Zetland. You have found some data on the subject – the results of the opinion polls (see the table below). Use the following plan: – make an opening statement on the subject of the project; – select and report 2-3 facts; – make 1-2 comparisons where relevant and give your comments; – outline a problem that can arise with volunteering and suggest a way of solving it; – conclude by giving and explaining your opinion on the importance of volunteering for teenagers. Activity Number of respondents (%) Working in animal shelters 56 Working in shelters for homeless people 17 Helping the elderly 12 Planting new trees 8 Picking up rubbish 7
2 Аспект 1: Вступление соответствует предложенной теме проектной работы + Today, there are many opportunities for teenagers to volunteer. The aim of my project is to examine what volunteer activities are popular among teenagers in Zetland. As part of my project, I have found a table with some results of relevant opinion polls, and i n this essay I will describe the data and express my opinion on the subject of the project. + правильно передана ком. ситуация + проект упомянут + тема проекта передана точно (перефразировать необязательно) + страна и респонденты указаны верно + указано, откуда взяты данные P.S. Первое предложение писать необязательно.
3 Аспект 2: 2-3 факта из данных в таблице приведены + According to the table, the majority of the respondents (56%) commit themselves to working at animal shelters. Just under a fifth of those surveyed (17 %) volunteer at shelters for homeless people and another 12% are involved in elderly care. The rest of the respondents plant trees and pick up litter, at 8% and 7% respectively. + ссылка на таблицу (данные/результаты опросов) – понятно, откуда взяты данные + приведены три факта : 1 = 56%, 2 = 17%+12%, 3 = 8%+7% + проценты переданы верно + числовые данные написаны цифрами + средства лог. связи есть, использованы верно
4 Аспект 3: 1-2 существенных сравнения даны и прокомментированы + As can be seen from the table, there is a significant difference between the figure for working at animal shelters and the figure for helping the elderly: the former is 44% higher than the latter. This difference can probably be explained by the fact that taking care of old people requires more skills and time than looking after animals. + 1 сравнение дано ( лексика: a significant difference ; грамматика: 44% higher ) + приведен комментарий-пояснение - > сравнение существенное + средства лог. связи есть, использованы верно
5 Аспект 4 : Возможная проблема, связанная с волонтерством, обозначена, и её решение предложено + Despite the fact that volunteering is mainly associated with positives, there are some problems connected with it. One problem is that volunteering is physically and mentally exhausting and can be really stressful, especially for beginners. The best solution to this problem is to work under the supervision of experienced volunteers and ask them for help whenever a difficulty arises. + проблема : строго по плану, не про участников опроса! + проблема: по теме, реалистичная + решение: по теме, конкретное, реалистичное + средства лог. связи есть, использованы верно
6 Аспект 4 : Мнение автора о важности опыта волонтерской работы для подростков в заключении выражено и обосновано + To conclude, I would like to say that although volunteering can be challenging, it is very important for teenagers to get involved in volunteer work. I think so because the benefits it provides far outweigh any downsides. + свое мнение выражено эксплицитно + мнение обосновано + свое мнение: строго по теме + средства лог. связи есть, использованы верно
40.1 There are many opportunities for teenagers to volunteer today. The aim of my project is to examine what volunteer activities are popular among teenagers in Zetland. As part of my project, I have found a table with some results of relevant opinion polls, and in this essay I will describe the data and express my opinion on the subject of the project. According to the table, the majority of the respondents (56%) commit themselves to working at animal shelters. Just under a fifth (17%) of those surveyed volunteer at shelters for homeless people and another 12% are involved in elderly care. The rest of the respondents plant trees and pick up litter, at 8% and 7% respectively. As can be seen from the table, there is a significant difference between the figure for working at animal shelters and the figure for helping the elderly: the former is 44% higher than the latter. This difference can probably be explained by the fact that taking care of old people requires more skills and time than looking after animals. Despite the fact that volunteering is mainly associated with positives, there are some problems connected with it. One problem is that volunteering is physically and mentally exhausting and can cause beginner volunteers a lot of stress. The best solution to this problem is for beginners to work under the supervision of experienced volunteers and ask them for help whenever a difficulty arises. To conclude, I would like to say that although volunteering can be challenging, it is very important for teenagers to get involved in volunteer work. I think so because the benefits it provides far outweigh any downsides. (275 w. ) https://vk.com/egexpert
